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Bombastic structure 1.0:


πŸ“In an economic context, where the mainstream industry being bound up to consumer behavior and mass production has become the norm, the rising similarity between countries can offer consumers a wider range of products and services and thus represent an economic benefit.


πŸ’₯In the example above, the structure is there to explain the idea


πŸ“ In a real-life context, where such ideas are considered utopian and marginalization of foreign ethnic groups has become the norm, the offer to preserve unique cultural heritage can make a big difference and represent a more sensible solution.


πŸ’₯ In this case, relating to the current time goes through this structure.


⚑️So, the frame goes as follows:

In an X context, where........have become the norm,........and represent......



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Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices, like smartphones, tablets and laptop computers.

Do the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?


Watching movies and playing video games have long been debated, with having instant access to them via modern devices like smartphones, laptops and tablets being common. While this trend is beneficial in some respect, I contend that its downsides are more significant.

Gaining immediate access to films and games can provide a cathartic experience, aiding mentally exhausted people in relieving stress. While enjoying twists and turns of, for example, a comedy or shooting arrows in an online game, intrusive, negative thoughts are bound to lose their power, which, as a result, allows people to recover their energy. Another upside, one that is mostly the case with game players, is the development of skills. To elucidate, having a team to work on and strategies to use or improve, gamers are likely to nurture their team work, analytical and critical decision-making skills, all of which are also crucial in academic and professional lives. Some prevalent examples of such games are PUBG and Counter-Strike – the two video games that require a high level of group cohesion and perfect decision-making.

However compelling these merits may sound, I am still convinced that potential demerits overshadow them. Firstly, long exposure to screens can take a heavy toll on eyesight, posture and, in extreme cases, mental health, leading to addiction. These adverse effects have particularly been reported by healthcare professionals around the world, with children and young adults being the most affected. On top of that is another, no less considerable, drawback – poor interpersonal skills. Naturally, as peopleβ€”now more than everβ€”tend to spend long hours on film and game playing platforms, their real-life interactions within society may be reduced, thereby resulting in underdeveloped social abilities, from negotiation to public speaking. With such skills lagging behind, social life is bound to be limited to online communication, which is often known for being not the best substitution for face-to-face interactions.

To infer, although quick access to films and games via mobile devices offers a stress-reliving environment and cultivates some cognitive abilities, I assert that they confer even more consequential disadvantages: deterioration of mental and physical health, as well as poorly-developed person-to-person skills.


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-in so doing-

βž–That is an amazing fixed phrase which can reduce a long, redundant clause, showing the reader your ability to distill 2-3 sentences into 1, well-written and well-structured masterpiece.

‼️Example:

❌ The local authorities have recently introduced a nudging policy, and this was followed by an increase public satisfaction levels .

βœ… The local authorities have recently introduced a nudging and in so doing elevated public satisfaction levels.


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I've submitted this essay to an examiner (Glyn) and given the 265-word count, it has pulled off an 8.0 overall. https://youtu.be/0eSSCu4riTU?si=3IkY7Urfi0J7JRJ0
Well, some reflection:

βž– undershot in persuasiveness when presenting the points (T/R suffered as a result)
βž– overshot in lexis (L/R got lowered because of that)

πŸ”₯But again, 7/9/8/9 is veeeeeery close to 8.5. This is amazing considering the word count. That is one more thing to be confident about as far as my proficiency goes πŸ†’
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To raise the profile of something⚑️

βž–meaning ( to raise public awareness of something) βœ…
βž–use (to paraphrase 'make more popular' or 'make others know') βœ…
βž–context (for a good cause, meaning positive) βœ…


‼️Example:

- Silent nutrition programs are not best-placed to raise the profile of consuming nutrition-dense food.

L/R is πŸ“ˆ

#novelty
#vocab
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First, read this:
One primary benefit of modern teaching techniques is the versatility they offer. This is often the case as such approaches aim to provide students with an engaging environmentβ€”one that would curb the feeling of being confined to certain strict rules that most schools impose on. Feeling at liberty to express their thoughts and discuss nuances of the subject matter with classmates, students are more likely to gain a better understanding of the discipline, with schools also becoming places where student independence is not fettered, but rather fostered. Private schools could be seen in such light; though not affordable to people of all stations, these schools normally have competent staff driven by the desire to create an inclusive and stress-free atmosphere on lessons, which would translate into high academic performance. It is therefore justifiable for up-to-date techniques in teaching to be set in place.


Now, let's talk.

βž–What is different this time? Huh, you see, I've picked up too many things but have put to practice too few. So, a couple of off-the-chart expressions and grammatical moves are going to appear in further posts, too.

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Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and work of arts by using a computer.

Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


Because of the Internet sources where people can find photos of art exhibitions and historical objects, some say that we will no longer need museums and art galleries. I do not agree with this view for several key reasons.

One of these reasons is that museum and art gallery trips are more engaging than reading bland facts on the Internet. Unlike online libraries, art and history museums normally have a service where visitors can hire a guide and spend their time playing interactive games, having lovely talks and seeing distinctive features of exhibitions. With websites, however, this is not the case. In addition, when people spend their time together in museum and art gallery trips, bonds between them can stay strong.

Secondly, museums and art galleries are known to be places which give people an opportunity to connect to their past. This is simply because wandering around ancient objects like swords, shields, and scrolls, helps appreciate what ancestors of a nation sacrificed for future generations. There is also historical knowledge that can be learned from such objects. In other words, many traditions and customs tend to be related to handicrafts that people make, so if a person sees and touches ancient items, they might learn several historical facts about their own history.

In conclusion, I do not think that photos and videos on the Internet can replace museums and art galleries, which present artefacts in an interesting manner, allow ties between people to be maintained strong and connect people to their history.


252 words, Band 7.0 βœ”οΈ

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15-min video walkthrough ?
Will be 4x8.0 + 1x9.0 already. The video is in the process ⚑️
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πŸ’­ I've been having a lot of reflection on my latest 8.5 in Task 2, so the differences I've found are here:

➑️ 8.0 and 9.0 in C/C, in my case, are different in how good I am without cliche cohesive devices (however, moreover, furthermore) and also readability (sentence length was way more optimal last time, as I has only 2 long sentences; the rest were not as stretchy but varied)

➑️ 8.0 and 9.0 in L/R - sustained (meaning all across the essay) with more topical lexis (food safety, food security, food supply, to meet dietary needs, to source food locally, agricultural produce, nutritional value, nutrition programs and so on)


⚑️Example:

Supporting ageing population is not always sensible, since it strains healthcare systems. Having an ever-growing number of senior citizens may compel a country to raise its spending on the sector, which possibly comes at the cost of another sector’s budget. This disproportionate emphasis can further result in an unevenly developed economy. Such a tendency is seen in Japan, where the magnitude of the problem is, however, at its outset only. Adding to the resource disparity, age bias can also be fueled with notable age gaps among workers. Cultural values, life priorities, corporate ethics and professional principles are the factors that tend change through generations, though to varying degrees. So, the wider the age gap, the more those differences are pronounced. With these aspects, group cohesion within a cohort is likely to be more challenging to be sustained or bolstered, potentially resulting in miscommunication or lower productivity at the workplace.
βž–So, I did not really use much of mechanical, trivial connection, but only once (however).

βž–Sentences are also well-structured and are not long, making them more readable and smoother. Lexis is not an exception, too; less cliche phrasing and more topical leaning.

#insight
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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


People have different opinions on using sports as a means to advertise a company, and potential effects of this advertising are a subject of many debates. I agree that both positive and negative effects of sports as a way to advertise products and services are equally important.

Regarding benefits, some say that the main one is attracting more customers. Many commercial organizations spend huge sums on showing their brand logo on a billboard around a stadium, on uniforms of the players in a match, and TV commercials. All these advertisements help the business increase sales and raise awareness of potential consumers. Sports fans are also known to be more loyal, because they tend to root for their favorite sportspersons or clubs for years, which can promise good revenues in many years to come.

As for drawbacks, others may think that some advertisements are too intrusive. They claim companies like Pepsi or Lay’s have put their brand names literally everywhere, making it difficult for fans to truly enjoy the match. Even on TV, mid-match commercials can appear too often, which does not allow for a complete sense of enjoyment. This is not to mention that brand recall can become linked to only sports, not the quality of products or customer service, so that the company’s values and business culture become overshadowed by those of sports.

In conclusion, while there are some debates over advantages and disadvantages of promoting products and services in sports, I believe that both have equal importance.

250 words, Band 7.0-7.5 βœ”οΈ

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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both views and give your opinion. People have different opinions on using sports as a means to advertise…
❗️You don't need 8.5-9.0 band essays, if your own deserve 6.0-6.5.

‼️ These 7.0-7.5 band essays are for educational purposes, so that you can see what is 0.5-1.0 band progress and how to make it.
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⚑️ I'm out of this world with G/A and L/R being at 9.0 each. This is the pay-off I'm in love withβ€”because all I put in paid back in a very beautiful manner.

βž–Band 9.0 hashtags:

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🦘Kangaroo approach for discussion essays:

'X (topical) has been a matter that continues to polarize X (topical) community
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πŸ” This is a cool and pertinent tool for discussion essays' intro.

Example:
Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


βž– Sponsorship by companies driven to promote their products in the sports realm (topical) has been a matter that continues to polarize the sports (topical) community.


πŸ’Ž Perks of such an approach:

1️⃣natural expressive language (L/R)
2️⃣a combination of 2 different tenses (G/A)

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That........should be/could be/need to be/has to be a reason for....

➑️ This is a noun clause translating into a new type of complex sentence

Example:

❌ Lack of funding is the reason for the industry to be underdeveloped in many countries.

βœ”οΈ That funding is insufficient tends to be the reason for the underdeveloped sports industry in many nations.


G/A is πŸ”Ό

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🐢Dingo approach 1.0:

This idea builds on......, which is the case in modern terms in countries like X,Y,Z, where such ......have been normalized.


⚑️ The very idea of homogenization being advantageous builds on consumeristic values, which is the case in modern terms in countries like the USA, the UK and China, where fashion, dietary and sports similarities across communities have been normalized.

πŸ’‘ It goes to tie up an explanatory part with an example in a very smooth manner.

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C/C - 9.0

Guys, if you don't stick to these postulates, I don't know how to help you then⁉️

βž– take notes
βž–practice everything separately
βž–work until you meet the criteria

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