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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


People have different opinions on using sports as a means to advertise a company, and potential effects of this advertising are a subject of many debates. I agree that both positive and negative effects of sports as a way to advertise products and services are equally important.

Regarding benefits, some say that the main one is attracting more customers. Many commercial organizations spend huge sums on showing their brand logo on a billboard around a stadium, on uniforms of the players in a match, and TV commercials. All these advertisements help the business increase sales and raise awareness of potential consumers. Sports fans are also known to be more loyal, because they tend to root for their favorite sportspersons or clubs for years, which can promise good revenues in many years to come.

As for drawbacks, others may think that some advertisements are too intrusive. They claim companies like Pepsi or Lay’s have put their brand names literally everywhere, making it difficult for fans to truly enjoy the match. Even on TV, mid-match commercials can appear too often, which does not allow for a complete sense of enjoyment. This is not to mention that brand recall can become linked to only sports, not the quality of products or customer service, so that the company’s values and business culture become overshadowed by those of sports.

In conclusion, while there are some debates over advantages and disadvantages of promoting products and services in sports, I believe that both have equal importance.

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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both views and give your opinion. People have different opinions on using sports as a means to advertise…
❗️You don't need 8.5-9.0 band essays, if your own deserve 6.0-6.5.

‼️ These 7.0-7.5 band essays are for educational purposes, so that you can see what is 0.5-1.0 band progress and how to make it.
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⚡️ I'm out of this world with G/A and L/R being at 9.0 each. This is the pay-off I'm in love with—because all I put in paid back in a very beautiful manner.

Band 9.0 hashtags:

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🦘Kangaroo approach for discussion essays:

'X (topical) has been a matter that continues to polarize X (topical) community
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🔍 This is a cool and pertinent tool for discussion essays' intro.

Example:
Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


Sponsorship by companies driven to promote their products in the sports realm (topical) has been a matter that continues to polarize the sports (topical) community.


💎 Perks of such an approach:

1️⃣natural expressive language (L/R)
2️⃣a combination of 2 different tenses (G/A)

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That........should be/could be/need to be/has to be a reason for....

➡️ This is a noun clause translating into a new type of complex sentence

Example:

Lack of funding is the reason for the industry to be underdeveloped in many countries.

✔️ That funding is insufficient tends to be the reason for the underdeveloped sports industry in many nations.


G/A is 🔼

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🐶Dingo approach 1.0:

This idea builds on......, which is the case in modern terms in countries like X,Y,Z, where such ......have been normalized.


⚡️ The very idea of homogenization being advantageous builds on consumeristic values, which is the case in modern terms in countries like the USA, the UK and China, where fashion, dietary and sports similarities across communities have been normalized.

💡 It goes to tie up an explanatory part with an example in a very smooth manner.

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C/C - 9.0

Guys, if you don't stick to these postulates, I don't know how to help you then⁉️

take notes
practice everything separately
work until you meet the criteria

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1️⃣ Editorial bias - a cool example and argument for topics like 'news', 'print media', 'sources of information', 'publications' etc.

2️⃣—where..... - a beautiful use of 'em' dash which does help your G/A to bring some happiness to your life....

3️⃣Are taken at face value (C1) - awesome, awesome!

4️⃣ —for example,.... - this is a very high level flexibility.

This may be due to several reasons—for example, the audience...
This may be due to several reasons; for example, the audience....
This may be due to several reasons. For example, the audience....


— All of these are VALID, but differ a bit in tone. You need them to show 'a wider range of structures and punctuation marks'.

5️⃣—a sort of confirmation bias... - again 'em' dash yet this time introducing a parenthesis (a little comment explaining or adding information)



➡️ Note! Approaching EVERY single passage this way is such a powerful way to pick up some killing grammar and lexical chunks!


#writing_tips #grammar #article_analysis
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G/A 📤 (compound adjective)

🚩 Topic sentence: The remainder of countries recorded below-average numbers

🚩Body: This growth, however, was not sustained, with 2003-2004 years seeing below-average numbers.

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Correlative conjunction (not only...but also) at its finest❗️

1️⃣Following your instructor's advice not only helps you become a better reader; it also gives you charm and sharpens your discipline.

2️⃣Following your instructor's advice not only helps you become a better reader—it also gives you charm and sharpens your discipline.

3️⃣Following your instructor's advice not only helps you become a better reader, but it also gives you charm and sharpens your discipline.


😎You need it for 2 beautiful reasons. One is G/A, and the other is that your examiner will likely to call you asking about your grammar teacher.

✔️ Save, learn, practice, get 7.0+ in G/A and drop photos of your score breakdown in the comment section!

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➡️ Band 9.0 body:


T/R - fully explained and explored the topic, with counter-aguments debunked (i.g Compared to.....,Without language).

C/C - reads effortlessly. Transitions are flawless, non-repetitive and, importantly, uncommon, too. (Of all, Compared to, Without language)

L/R - Both idiomatic and academic lexis is insanely balanced and expanded, showing a sophisticated control over language nuances (pale in significance, ascent to unparalleled power, embarked on, material existence, originates)

G/A - punctuation is well-controlled and varied as well, with a wide range of complex structures shown accurately. (—the wheel........; but the.........; since everything........; and even......)


Source: Cambridge 11, Test 4.

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L/R—7.0 vs L/R—9.0

1️⃣ 7.0 - The policy also offers social benefits. (skillful use of uncommon lexis is not shown)

2️⃣ 9.0 - Co-benefits of the policy, especially social ones, are no less important. (In this case, sophisticated control of lexis is evident)

Source: Multiple articles and expert-level essays. If you need some more such expressions, just tap 🔥

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...yet often-overlooked.... (a parenthetical expression)



1️⃣ Use it when the information you want to add is not essential, but only commentary.

Another, yet often-overstated, benefit to using AI in education is the time efficiency.


❗️In this case, I can take the expression out and the sentence still remains meaningful and complete.



2️⃣ 1-2 instances of such an expression do serve as an example of your Grammar Range

Another benefit of X that people often cite is...
Another, and also often-cited, benefit of X is..✔️


❗️Meaning is the same but control of grammatical features is way more sophisticated


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#grammar
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Ellipsis at its peak....

The structure: In X, less/more than Z% of population/workers/respondents did/worked/slept; today, almost one in two/three in four is.



1️⃣ G/A - punctuation is accurately used ✔️

2️⃣ L/R - lexical range is flexible ✔️


🌐 Source: Cambridge Trainer 2

📌 You need such structures to show variety in both L/R and G/A in Task 1.


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#grammar
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In today’s world, private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most scientific research.
Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?


One of the trends that has recently occurred is that the private sector now is funding and holding much of scientific research. Despite economic benefits this development offers, I believe the downsides of it are more significant, from both societal and scientific standpoints.

Private funding does lead to financial gains, however. Because companies, be it food chains or canneries, tend to prioritize efficiency gains, thus shifting focus of scientific investigations towards either streamlining production or introducing innovative technology. Such a shift can not only bolster revenues, but also reduce operation costs. On top of that, private scientific research sometimes draws more investments, as a result of which more experiments, top-notch technology and, no less importantly, high-profile experts can be involved too. These factors alone boost both productivity and efficiency of the research, yielding tangible results, like the formula for Coca Cola drinks.

Yet, I assert that the demerits are greater, for example when viewed through a social lens. When public is ill-informed on scientific breakthroughs, from nanotechnology to newly-found particles, education and overall scientific development in such a nation is likely to face hindrances. Without the laser technology, specifically, the medical industry would be challenged to proceed surgeries with as much precision—thus proving the importance of private corporations sharing science knowledge. Commercialization is another threat; it is this factor that drives company's sales when an invention is applied in production, but it also confines the scope of the research. Resultantly, delays in scientific progress are to happen—and unfortunately so.

To conclude, although there are some positives of science being sponsored by non-government companies, my conviction is that the negative aspects—both social and scientific—are more considerable.


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1️⃣ One of the things I did differently to hit 9.0 in L/R in T2 was to focus more on the topical range.

2️⃣ The topic is changing jobs and now look at this teeny-tiny paragraph: working lives, entrepreneurial, job moves, and tenure per role.

3️⃣ So, the takeaway is, be more topic-specific!

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The chart describes a breakdown of labor force and management, with units measured in percentage points.

In short, in Egypt, women represented the smallest portion of the workforce, compared to other countries listed. This, however, was not the case in Japan, where the opposite was true, while Australia and the USA top the list as women there comprised the largest fraction in the chart.

The share of female workers in Japan was highest, at 48%, followed closely by the USA (at 46%), Sri Lanka and Australia (both of which stood at 42%). Egypt, a country where only one in five worker is a woman, rounded out the list.

Yet much lower proportions for women were seen in managerial positions. The USA and Australia reported to have 43% of women in such positions, almost three times the figure for Japan (17%). In Egypt, though, the percentage was even smaller—one-fourth that of the leading two nations (12%), but it was female managers in Sri Lanka that recorded a chart low of 9%.


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Fewer young people read books nowadays.

What are the causes of this?
What are the effects?


There is an issue prevalent in many countries—a decreasing number of the young reading books. This is largely attributable to modern reading habits and shifts in values, with potential ramifications ranging from an illiterate generation to the disappearance of reading hubs, so-called reading clubs.

Of the major reasons behind the falling number of young readers, current reading trends are the most common. Unfortunately, young readers are now more attracted to e-books, online blogs and articles and, as a result, conventional books are falling out of favor—even more so in countries, such as Uzbekistan and Kazakhstan, that have just seen their reading culture transform. Such changes are thus a byproduct of modern life, however sad it seems. The other reason, newly-adopted values, is no less important; because school and university students have to be digitally literate, they are compelled to be exposed to computer technology—so they can secure a well-paid job or achieve great academic heights, for example. Had they been given a choice to remain with job requirements of the past, which did not encompass computer literacy, reading textbooks would have definitely been more commonplace.

Shedding light on repercussions of this, now-unpopular reading print books, a less literate generation seems to be the most concerning. With textbooks left behind and habits shifted towards entertainment, binge scrolling, and video games—three of the most widespread pastime activities of the 21st century—becoming less educated is just a matter of time. American teenagers, who used to be performing well and having a good grasp of history in the early 2000s, cannot now boast the same erudition. Asian young people are not outliers too: they have also been subject to modernization of their leisure time spending habits, ones that used to be devoted to reading novels and, to a lesser extent, ancient history. If these implications are to persist, reading hubs are also at danger. These places, where young readers used to gather to share ideas, discuss scenes in books and therefore develop their reading skills, are likely to become much less often visited, or in extreme cases even empty —a mutual drawback for both the visitors themselves and the hubs.

In summary, there are two root causes explaining why readers numbers' are on the decline: technological advancements and digital literacy. Accompanying this development, however, are less knowledgeable young people and the prospective shut-down of reading hubs.


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Extract 1:

According to the census, 44.7 million Americans are currently Hispanic, more than five times higher than in 1966, while the Asian population is as large as 14.3 million, a ten-fold increase over the 1966 level.



🔠 T/A—a very consistent way to compare and, at the same time, summarize.

🔠C/C—from the largest to the smallest. Makes a lot of sense

🔠 L/R—a very natural and flexible use of lexis

🔠 G/A4 different types of clauses in the same, not bulky sentence. All are put together accurately without impeding communication.

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Human activity has a negative impact on plants and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can still be taken to improve this situation.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.



Opinions on the environmental protection are divided: some contend we are late to take any action; others disagree, claiming there are still some effective approaches, which would ameliorate the issue. I, though, firmly believe the question is too individual and both parties' views are valid.

Opponents of environmental preservation may say that, given the magnitude of climate change, habitat fragmentation and other problems alike, it is worthless to put any effort into it. Weather patterns have become more unpredictable and, even worse, current technological can not allow for tackling it, nor can we persuade countries with abundant natural parks to designate them for endangered animals. This is much as in the case of the Aral Desert, previously known as the Aral Sea, that locals attempted to re-fill with water again by channeling it from a Russian river. Yet ultimately, Russian authorities declined the offer. Such a list of unsolvable challenges may go beyond these problems—to, for example, deforestation or, sadly, animal extinction.

This view, however sensible it seems, is as significant as that of supporters of environmental protection. They often put forward an idea of funding de-extinction projects to bring back some valuable species, like the Thylacine, which would probably reduce the dominance of Dingo in Australia. Channeling some funds to nations where national parks are extensive and can further be equipped with all the necessary equipment to accommodate more animals can be of great help too. In return to such a favor, these countries would receive financial rewards or gain more popularity to establish better international relations, an aspect that serves as a cornerstone of international trade, for instance.

Seen as positive as they are, the two arguments above are, however, subjective, for none of them can address worldwide issues, but only regional ones. I am, therefore, of the stance that in some cases, like habitat destruction, it is feasible, and also morally advisable, to be proactive; yet if it is not generally viable, as it is with climate change, being skeptical of protecting environment today is understandable too. So, the question of whether to put forth the preservation of nature remains case-specific, thus requiring a different set of criteria to consider across cases.

In conclusion, both those who are in support and in opposition of taking measures to counteract environmental problems have valid reasons to prove their stance. My conviction is that the case can't be generalized, because of which separately considered criteria would be necessary.


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