Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and work of arts by using a computer.

Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Because of the Internet sources where people can find photos of art exhibitions and historical objects, some say that we will no longer need museums and art galleries. I do not agree with this view for several key reasons.

One of these reasons is that museum and art gallery trips are more engaging than reading bland facts on the Internet. Unlike online libraries, art and history museums normally have a service where visitors can hire a guide and spend their time playing interactive games, having lovely talks and seeing distinctive features of exhibitions. With websites, however, this is not the case. In addition, when people spend their time together in museum and art gallery trips, bonds between them can stay strong.

Secondly, museums and art galleries are known to be places which give people an opportunity to connect to their past. This is simply because wandering around ancient objects like swords, shields, and scrolls, helps appreciate what ancestors of a nation sacrificed for future generations. There is also historical knowledge that can be learned from such objects. In other words, many traditions and customs tend to be related to handicrafts that people make, so if a person sees and touches ancient items, they might learn several historical facts about their own history.

In conclusion, I do not think that photos and videos on the Internet can replace museums and art galleries, which present artefacts in an interesting manner, allow ties between people to be maintained strong and connect people to their history.


252 words, Band 7.0 ✔️

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Will be 4x8.0 + 1x9.0 already. The video is in the process ⚡️

💭 I've been having a lot of reflection on my latest 8.5 in Task 2, so the differences I've found are here:

➡️ 8.0 and 9.0 in C/C, in my case, are different in how good I am without cliche cohesive devices (however, moreover, furthermore) and also readability (sentence length was way more optimal last time, as I has only 2 long sentences; the rest were not as stretchy but varied)

➡️ 8.0 and 9.0 in L/R - sustained (meaning all across the essay) with more topical lexis (food safety, food security, food supply, to meet dietary needs, to source food locally, agricultural produce, nutritional value, nutrition programs and so on)


⚡️Example:

Supporting ageing population is not always sensible, since it strains healthcare systems. Having an ever-growing number of senior citizens may compel a country to raise its spending on the sector, which possibly comes at the cost of another sector’s budget. This disproportionate emphasis can further result in an unevenly developed economy. Such a tendency is seen in Japan, where the magnitude of the problem is, however, at its outset only. Adding to the resource disparity, age bias can also be fueled with notable age gaps among workers. Cultural values, life priorities, corporate ethics and professional principles are the factors that tend change through generations, though to varying degrees. So, the wider the age gap, the more those differences are pronounced. With these aspects, group cohesion within a cohort is likely to be more challenging to be sustained or bolstered, potentially resulting in miscommunication or lower productivity at the workplace.

➖So, I did not really use much of mechanical, trivial connection, but only once (however).

➖Sentences are also well-structured and are not long, making them more readable and smoother. Lexis is not an exception, too; less cliche phrasing and more topical leaning.

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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People have different opinions on using sports as a means to advertise a company, and potential effects of this advertising are a subject of many debates. I agree that both positive and negative effects of sports as a way to advertise products and services are equally important.

Regarding benefits, some say that the main one is attracting more customers. Many commercial organizations spend huge sums on showing their brand logo on a billboard around a stadium, on uniforms of the players in a match, and TV commercials. All these advertisements help the business increase sales and raise awareness of potential consumers. Sports fans are also known to be more loyal, because they tend to root for their favorite sportspersons or clubs for years, which can promise good revenues in many years to come.

As for drawbacks, others may think that some advertisements are too intrusive. They claim companies like Pepsi or Lay’s have put their brand names literally everywhere, making it difficult for fans to truly enjoy the match. Even on TV, mid-match commercials can appear too often, which does not allow for a complete sense of enjoyment. This is not to mention that brand recall can become linked to only sports, not the quality of products or customer service, so that the company’s values and business culture become overshadowed by those of sports.

In conclusion, while there are some debates over advantages and disadvantages of promoting products and services in sports, I believe that both have equal importance.

250 words, Band 7.0-7.5 ✔️

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❗️You don't need 8.5-9.0 band essays, if your own deserve 6.0-6.5.

‼️ These 7.0-7.5 band essays are for educational purposes, so that you can see what is 0.5-1.0 band progress and how to make it.

⚡️ I'm out of this world with G/A and L/R being at 9.0 each. This is the pay-off I'm in love with—because all I put in paid back in a very beautiful manner.

➖Band 9.0 hashtags:

#novelty
#vocab

I'll go on posting such insights. Stay tuned🖥

🦘Kangaroo approach for discussion essays:

'X (topical) has been a matter that continues to polarize X (topical) community'

🔍 This is a cool and pertinent tool for discussion essays' intro.

Example:
Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

➖ Sponsorship by companies driven to promote their products in the sports realm (topical) has been a matter that continues to polarize the sports (topical) community.


💎 Perks of such an approach:

1️⃣natural expressive language (L/R)
2️⃣a combination of 2 different tenses (G/A)

#novelty

That........should be/could be/need to be/has to be a reason for....

➡️ This is a noun clause translating into a new type of complex sentence

Example:

❌ Lack of funding is the reason for the industry to be underdeveloped in many countries.

✔️ That funding is insufficient tends to be the reason for the underdeveloped sports industry in many nations.

G/A is 🔼

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🐶Dingo approach 1.0:

This idea builds on......, which is the case in modern terms in countries like X,Y,Z, where such ......have been normalized.

⚡️ The very idea of homogenization being advantageous builds on consumeristic values, which is the case in modern terms in countries like the USA, the UK and China, where fashion, dietary and sports similarities across communities have been normalized.

💡 It goes to tie up an explanatory part with an example in a very smooth manner.

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C/C - 9.0

Guys, if you don't stick to these postulates, I don't know how to help you then⁉️

➖ take notes
➖practice everything separately
➖work until you meet the criteria

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1️⃣ Editorial bias - a cool example and argument for topics like 'news', 'print media', 'sources of information', 'publications' etc.

2️⃣—where..... - a beautiful use of 'em' dash which does help your G/A to bring some happiness to your life....

3️⃣Are taken at face value (C1) - awesome, awesome!

4️⃣ —for example,.... - this is a very high level flexibility.

This may be due to several reasons—for example, the audience...
This may be due to several reasons; for example, the audience....
This may be due to several reasons. For example, the audience....

— All of these are VALID, but differ a bit in tone. You need them to show 'a wider range of structures and punctuation marks'.

5️⃣—a sort of confirmation bias... - again 'em' dash yet this time introducing a parenthesis (a little comment explaining or adding information)



➡️ Note! Approaching EVERY single passage this way is such a powerful way to pick up some killing grammar and lexical chunks!


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G/A 📤 (compound adjective)

🚩 Topic sentence: The remainder of countries recorded below-average numbers

🚩Body: This growth, however, was not sustained, with 2003-2004 years seeing below-average numbers.

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Correlative conjunction (not only...but also) at its finest❗️

1️⃣Following your instructor's advice not only helps you become a better reader; it also gives you charm and sharpens your discipline.

2️⃣Following your instructor's advice not only helps you become a better reader—it also gives you charm and sharpens your discipline.

3️⃣Following your instructor's advice not only helps you become a better reader, but it also gives you charm and sharpens your discipline.

😎You need it for 2 beautiful reasons. One is G/A, and the other is that your examiner will likely to call you asking about your grammar teacher.

✔️ Save, learn, practice, get 7.0+ in G/A and drop photos of your score breakdown in the comment section!

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➡️ Band 9.0 body:


➖T/R - fully explained and explored the topic, with counter-aguments debunked (i.g Compared to.....,Without language).

➖C/C - reads effortlessly. Transitions are flawless, non-repetitive and, importantly, uncommon, too. (Of all, Compared to, Without language)

➖L/R - Both idiomatic and academic lexis is insanely balanced and expanded, showing a sophisticated control over language nuances (pale in significance, ascent to unparalleled power, embarked on, material existence, originates)

➖G/A - punctuation is well-controlled and varied as well, with a wide range of complex structures shown accurately. (—the wheel........; but the.........; since everything........; and even......)


Source: Cambridge 11, Test 4.

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L/R—7.0 vs L/R—9.0

1️⃣ 7.0 - The policy also offers social benefits. (skillful use of uncommon lexis is not shown)

2️⃣ 9.0 - Co-benefits of the policy, especially social ones, are no less important. (In this case, sophisticated control of lexis is evident)

Source: Multiple articles and expert-level essays. If you need some more such expressions, just tap 🔥

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