132. ANUPRIYA JOEL - ANNE ELLIS

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Mrs Ellis had definitive symptoms of the diagnosis and found to be...( No need this type of stories.. straight to the point because you have already mentioned that she has renal colic.)


Mrs Ellis' ( if S is the last letter, just put an appostrophe only)

Advised ( verb advise)

Her( gender change)

No need a comma before such as

3gm/ kg

Mrs Ellis'

Urine output

With the use of

Mrs Ellis'

Scheduled with the urologist..( needs article usage review )

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133. ANUPRIYA JOEL - JANET FAGAN

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Conciseness and clarity issues

Green lines are important points for the diatecian others are semi relevant.

Medical history could be explained in the third paragraph

Two green boxed should come first

She has had osteoarthritis..since when?

Medication details are not relevant

Instead of writing medical related problems, need to concentrate on weight,diet and habits.

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