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Q: Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?


According to investigation that has been conducted by a statistic, many a species of food and drink prepare the ground for encounters the health problem, owning to high levels of sugar. So there is a measure to reduce the consume sugar that is to more expensive the kind of edible. I wholeheartedly disagree due to the disadvantages of any type of manufactures.


Although, sugar which be used in products accounted for many diseases, by making it more expensive, Will not people purchase less sugar. The matter of fact, it is unlike that measure work. Never do restricts work as well as over the last few years that not only it didn't work, but also people have been more encourage. Because it seems they have been more valuable to have.


Moreover, providing that prices rise, all seller will lose either in buying their manufactures or selling them. Eventually, implements increasing the cost of sugar programs is just violation of laws. In addition, over the last year, the diet industry has been improved and people are going on a diet. Since sugar should be removed in this routine program, this measure does not require. Best suggestion to address illness is as follows to promote the education and information about the sides effects of sugary food.


The last but not least. There are a significant number of poor family who cannot effort to pay in this price of food and drinks which contain the sugar, so they should be helped and providing some food or also cake for their children's birthday instead of enhancing the price of products.


To sum up, in my opinion, it is not necessary to increase the price. Maybe it bring out the reserve results. Not only sugary food has got loads of inferior nutrition but also it leads to problems in your body and health. Only through own will can give people motivation to consume less sugar.
Cambridge 10 Test1

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.


To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?


Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Write at least 250 words.


It is an undeniable fact that distinguishing between helpful and harmful things is crucial for young children. At first glance, it seems difficult to make a spontaneous decision about punishment, because it includes advantages and disadvantages either, but with serious consideration, this approach is more beneficial than harmful.

One of the main reasons that I agree with punishment is that we live in a fast-paced and hazardous circumstance and if children are not aware of the positive and negative points of each issue, it will have undesirable consequences for them. For instance, if children do not have information about trust, they will think that all individuals are reliable and this belief can be too dangerous for them. Let me give a real example, I know a girl who relied on a man that buy some candies for her but after that, he stole her accessories which were gold.

In my opinion, utilizing punishment would be efficient for some goals and it can be helpful, training children to detect the differences between right and wrong things but we should have some guidelines for punishment, I mean that there should be some restrictions for families about punishment. I think that a physical penalty is one of the worst things that individuals can consider for their kids. For example, I read in a newspaper that a man, the father of a child, hit his child and the outcome of this behavior was irreparable, the Child is deaf now. On the other hand, verbal penalties and teaching them through videos are very effective ways for our kids and it can be helpful for them when they are in society and have interactions with individuals.

In conclusion, I think that it is vital for kids to know about the differences between correct and wrong things, we should consider appropriate penalties for them and avoid physical punishments.
Cambridge 18 test1 Question:

The most important aim of scince should be to improve people's lives.
to waht extent do you agree or disagree.

Answer:
There has been a heated controversy in the academic world regarding the ultimate goal of science. Some individuals, emphasize on improvement of public life quality as the main aim of scientific activities. In my opinion knowledg is an infinite sphere and should not be limited to merely practical sciences.

Generally, mankind is curious and thends to explore as much as possible, whether for instructive purposes or just joy. While some sciences have direct impact on improving life standards, other fields have less concrete and immediate effect on everyday life. For example, majors such as medicine or engineering, directly impact healthcare advancement and industrial developement. In contrast, there are some academic disciplines like history and philosophy that do not present an observable results, yet have as important role as technical or medical sciences. Unfortunately, some people belittle humanities due to its intangible incomes and accuse it of being impractical.

Although the practical majors possess irefutable consequnces, but without guidance of intellect and appropriate management, these scienses can lead to a catastrophe. If an evil intention takes the political power, the invention of mass killing weapons or dangerous viruses will be the result. There are a lot of evidence in the historical experience in regard of powerfull countries attemts to achieve detrimential devices in order to serve evil intentions, like Nazies who used chemical science to genocide the Jews. The way to avoid such disasters is to rely on logical argument, and comprehensive knowledg about humans that can be traced in the so-called impractical fields, the humanities.

To conclude my points, every science will serve in a way and there is no useless scientific area. Deviding sciences to pragamtic and non-pragmatic sections will lead to hazardeous situation.
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      In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before, some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments.other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.
To what extend do the advantages of having ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

       In today's world, death rate in elderly people decreases, it has both advantages and disadantages, I explain how benefits outweigh the drawbacks.

      Ageing population creates some problems in every society. Firstly, disabled people that they are dependent to others will increases, so they could not afford doing their daily activities independently. Additionally, governement shold prepare more accommodations for maintaining aged people, so it requires extera costs from buildings' materials  to food sources.

      Despite these drawbacks, there are some benefits countributing this issue. Initially, living grand parents with families make them more happy and it creates a strong relationship between members of a family. More over, youth can utilize from aged people's experiences and advices. It is a valuable data that we can learn with out wasting money and time. Thirdly, elders are  the best source of memorizong culture, knowing important events that are useful for a society not only for young generation in their country but also in other cultures. Finally, some elderly people are specialised in their professions that after their retirement they could countinue bringing up young work force for serving society.


    In conclusion, it is true that increasing elderly people have both negative and positive results for government, but by understanding the effects of advantages and disadvantages, we can comprehend the profits such as using their experience, having a enjoyable life, and preservation culture outweigh the drawbacks.
While both the teenage years and adulthood offer unique sources of happiness, there are conflicting views about which period of life is the happiest one. Although some believe that teenagers enjoy the happiest time of their lives, others, myself included, are of the opinion that adulthood is accompanied by more happiness, despite the fact that there are also more responsibilities for adults to take.

On the one hand, adolescents have the golden opportunity to be happy because all they should be worry about is their school work. As a result, they have less responsibilities to shoulder, which allow them to enjoy more freedom to take advantage of every moments of their lives. For example, they have lots of friends to hang out with, contributing to their happiness. However, this kind of happiness is not deep and permanent, and as long as there are any problems, the joy and happiness will wipe out. Moreover, juniors usually rely on their parents for their expenses, which sometimes may have a negative impact on their mood because they may feel they do not have enough independency to make their own decisions.

On the other hand, adults enjoy more stability and fulfillment in their lives, which is a great source of happiness for them. That is to say, they stand on their own feet and they can make decisions autonomously. Moreover, people in their adulthood have usually started their own family. Developing strong relationship with their loved ones brings joy and love, adding to their overall happiness. Some may argue that adulthood is a period of countless responsibilities, which robes people of their loves. However, I think this responsibilities are lined with their choices, which not only is not a burden for them, but can foster joy in their lives.

In conclusion, it is my firm conviction that seniors enjoy deep happiness, compared to juniors, because of the stability and strong relationships they have formed in their lives.
In some societies, a vast majority of people are willing to know about the history of their houses.

In some cultures, there is a superstition which if people die in a house, the ghosts of them remain in the house forever. People who are superstitious believe this notion, so if they want to relocate their house, they will investigate the history of the new house. In addition, some intelligent persons inquireabout the sakes of the previous owner leaving a house. To exemplify, in numerous cases, people tend to change their house when there is a problem including lack of some amenities or adequate space. If new settlers are aware of the pros and cons of their selections, designating a favourable house for dwelling.

In order to acquire some information, people could ask some people living there before, or they can speak with neighbours living nearby their houses. In addition, wanting to achieve some accurate information, people could refer to civil registry office where are collected people's properties. The data of this organisation is more reliable than individual data due to the fact that residents’ information has been registered since along time ago. However, for more details, specific licenses should be given and presented to this organisation.

To sum up, some people have faith in ghosts or other supernatural creatures, so they research previous stories of their houses. In contrast, there are some individuals tending to perform wisely. In order to opt for the best house, these people ask landlords about the merits and demerits of the house or refer to civil registry offices.
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