Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, while others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues.

Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Intro:
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Most of the people think that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, weather others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money that could be used for important issues.

Now write the next sentence, and don’t use GPT. Let’s keep it human.

In my view, Olympic games truly can help to make more twisted nations.

I think we are done with the intro. Let’s move on to the first sentence of our body paragraph.

On the one hand, Olympic games present some talented people to us.

Next: explain this topic sentence

With the help of media and interest to the tournament, more people will be able to see the competence of the sportsmen.

Next: you can give an example or explain it further.

Moreover, it can bring motivation to athletes and make them work more or even harder.

Ok, now maybe an example.

Through competing with each other and winning a gold medal athletes can raise their nation's flag and the hymn of their nation is played for them, which also improves the identity of their nation.

Ok. What is next now?

As a result, they can inspire national pride and unity among their fellow citizens, while also enhancing their country's international reputation.

Great, now let’s move on the 2nd body.

On the other hand, constructing big stadiums and covering athletes' expenses can cost a lot of money for a country.

Ok, how do we continue from here?

Take an example of France which spent about 14 million dollars to the construction of stadiums and premises to hold the events and attending countries also are in huge expense, considering the money spent to travel, accommodation and basic needs of athletes and fan base.

You can now give further explanation or provide a result or an effect of this example.

These significant expenditures have led some to argue that the money could be better spent addressing urgent issues like poverty, education, or healthcare.

Ok, how can we complete body paragraph?

In short, though, Olympic games and sports competitions can help to strengthen bonds between nations, holding them can be considered as waste of state’s budget.

Conclusion?

To put summary, I plainly believe that besides the tremendous cost of implementing the Olympic Competitions, they arrange the expenses by dealing with plethora of essential global issues based on society and contributing to world peace and stability whole.

Is that it?

Ok, here is how your collective effort turned out to be:

Introduction:
Most of the people think that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, weather others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money that could be used for important issues. In my view, Olympic games truly can help to make more twisted nations.

Body Paragraph 1:
On the one hand, Olympic games present some talented people to us. With the help of media and interest to the tournament, more people will be able to see the competence of the sportsmen. Moreover, it can bring motivation to athletes and make them work more or even harder. Through competing with each other and winning a gold medal athletes can raise their nation’s flag and the hymn of their nation is played for them, which also improves the identity of their nation. As a result, they can inspire national pride and unity among their fellow citizens, while also enhancing their country’s international reputation.

Body Paragraph 2:
On the other hand, constructing big stadiums and covering athletes’ expenses can cost a lot of money for a country. Take an example of France which spent about 14 million dollars to the construction of stadiums and premises to hold the events and attending countries also are in huge expense, considering the money spent to travel, accommodation and basic needs of athletes and fan base. These significant expenditures have led some to argue that the money could be better spent addressing urgent issues like poverty, education, or healthcare. In short, though, Olympic games and sports competitions can help to strengthen bonds between nations, holding them can be considered as waste of state’s budget.

Conclusion:
To put summary, I plainly believe that besides the tremendous cost of implementing the Olympic Competitions, they arrange the expenses by dealing with plethora of essential global issues based on society and contributing to world peace and stability whole.


What score do you think this essay would get in the real exam?

1. Task Response (TR): Band 6
• The essay addresses the task by discussing both sides of the argument and provides an opinion.
• However, the ideas are not fully developed, and some points are unclear or lack sufficient explanation.
2. Coherence and Cohesion (CC): Band 6
• The essay has a basic organizational structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
• However, the cohesion is weak due to awkward transitions and some unclear connections between ideas.
3. Lexical Resource (LR): Band 5
• The essay attempts to use a range of vocabulary, but there are several errors in word choice and phrasing that affect clarity.
• Some expressions are awkward or incorrect, leading to confusion.
4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): Band 5
• There are frequent grammatical errors that impact the readability of the essay.
• Sentence structures are often awkward, and there are issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and punctuation.

Overall Band Score: 5.5

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